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Bright beams the Lily on the sun-glazed mount,
shining as a beacon to the long lost.
For long & grueling years of endless count,
through golden plains & valley's deep in frost
has he, in brimming expectation, sought
that blessed fruit of life & dreams whose rays
compact in splendor & deep in heaven wrought
brings clarity and peace to dreary days.
More than dreary have his gilded hours seemed,
and one morsel would ressurect each small,
glorious  second to eternal streams
of Frey's tears that dance in strong halls.
     His posture falls, for that was not his prize
     But a flower, tender in his tired eyes.
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This is the first in a series of sonnets that I'm writing, telling the story of some lad gone from his home and such nonesense blah blah.

I'm writing them more to stretch my chops as a writer than to write great poems.

Anyhow, let me know what you think.
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WOW. Sonebody finally abided by the proper way to write a sonnet. I'm shocked, but pleased. Now, I forget which is which, is this Petrarchan or Elizabethan?
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~Skriver Apr 11, 2005   Writer
Tecnically it's petrarchan, because it's only couplets, but I wanted a sestet at the end... so yeah, Elizabethan.

I hope you like it!

I replied to your last comment, but I guess it didn't go through, thanks for the last one.
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Not a problem. I do like your work, it's wonderul. You use brilliant imagery.
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~Skriver Apr 11, 2005   Writer
Thanks again!
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theres some nice images in there awesome work
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~Skriver Apr 4, 2005   Writer
Thanks buddy :0
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